Will You Walk into My Parlor?

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Photo (c) Victor and Sarah Potter

Will You Walk into My Parlor?

 Words 100

“No.” She refused.

The ring clattered to the floor. “I thought you wanted us to marry!”

“I did. Before…”

“Before?”

“Before my parents got to know about us living together.”

“But they still want you to…”

“Are you proposing to me out of concern for my parents or yours?”

“We can’t always live like this!”

Why not? Isn’t that what you said to me?”

“I…I was wrong. Society. Children…”

“No. You were right. We should adopt an orphan needing a home.”

“But…”

“Besides,” She paused, “I see no reason give up my independence just to keep track of your socks.”

***

Written for the Friday Fictioneers – a story in 100 words or less. Thanks to Rochelle for hosting the challenge and Victor and Sarah Potter for the photo prompt. To read the other stories inspired by this prompt, click here.

PS: Just a quick note to brag that I finally did what my blog had been crying out for months, okay years. I reorganized and updated my index making it easier to browse and check out earlier posts with snippets (but I’m still working on the blurbs). If you are free and so inclined how about browsing through the index of Short Stories or Photo posts? Feedback and suggestions most welcome!

Thanks for reading 🙂

 

 

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Dahlia

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57 thoughts on “Will You Walk into My Parlor?”

  1. Dear Dahlia
    You’ve written that beautifully, conveying so much understanding of the couple in so few words – and yet keeping the dialogue entirely natural. It’s a lovely twist at the end, too. (You’re very brave to use bathos for the twist, mind you – it could easily backfire – don’t worry, it doesn’t here!)
    I think they’ll marry, but on her terms! (And a good thing too!)
    Best wishes
    Penny

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  2. Living together sure lets you get to know the other one. Maybe just enough to know that you don’t want to spend the rest of your life together…. then again, maybe you do!

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  3. Maybe their wedding vows should read “for better or for socks.” An interesting note on cohabbing before the “I do”—people who live together, then marry, actually divorce more often than those who do not live together first.

    And no, I don’t know the exact statistics 🙂

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    1. For better or for socks – priceless Linda 😀 I have also noticed that – perhaps the expectations are higher and the security of marriage loosens the guard over good manners and healthy restraint.

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  4. Connie and I lived together for a year before marrying. Occassionally, Connie will say the only reason I married her was to please my mother. If that were true, I would have stuck it out for forty-three years and counting.

    I understand the girl’s argument though. Very believable dialogue. Well done.

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