SPF: Calling her Bluff

This week for the same setting and the same characters I ended up with two different stories and couldn’t choose between them. If you have the time and the inclination, I would appreciate if you would click here for the second version (which is actually the original version!) and do let me know your thoughts 🙂 From the comments, I thought it best to put the (edited) note right on top.

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Calling her Bluff

 Words 200

“Let’s go for a walk?” She looked with foreboding at his grim distant expression. She wished she were back home instead of at their honeymoon.

He shrugged. “Sure.”

Walking silently down the deserted streets, despair stole over her. He had seemed such a fun guy. Or was he too shy and nervous?

Suddenly, she doubled over.

Saina!” Tarun supported her. “Are you okay?”

“I…I…know this place,” she gasped. She raised a shaking finger. “I was lynched by a mob…” she shivered and shook unable to speak more.

He froze. Had be been conned into marrying a mad woman?

He steadied. “Relax. Let’s go back. I think you’re overtired.”

“I can see it all so clearly.” She went on unheeding. “So many people and I alone. Suki…”

“Suki?”

“My love. We wanted to marry but I was older than him.”

“Was Suki also killed?”

“He ran away.” She pointed. “He used to live in that house.”

“Perhaps he still lives there? Let’s go and check?”

“No!”

“Why not? Perhaps Suki’s still waiting for you?” He stepped forward to ring the bell.

Horrified, she clutched his arm and dragged him back. “Are you crazy?” She yelled.

“No. Are you?” His lips twitched.

***

Written for the Sunday Photo Fiction – a story in 200 words or less.  Thanks (and apologies for breaking any rules by a double post) to Alistair Forbes for hosting the challenge and the photo prompt. To read the other stories inspired by this photo click here

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Dahlia

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21 thoughts on “SPF: Calling her Bluff”

    1. Oh you simply must give it a try! I am sure you will do brilliantly. I was like this two years ago when I started. Actually still often struggle and am not always successful either. But I do enjoy the challenge of wrestling with the words and the photo 😀

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      1. yes, the title says that she is bluffing … in order to get rid of him?
        Within the story, I actually had the impression of reincarnation. She says she was lynched and he asked, if Suki was also murdered?
        The question is, why should age be an obstacle to getting married? This complete story of Suki and her would be interesting and therefore the knocking was very good ….; Another question would be what the husband plays for a role. How could she be so fooled in her husband, or how can you feel like this in your honeymoon?

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      2. There are many reasons for objections to marriage, specially in India where most marriages are arranged by the families and girls (or boys) have little say in their choice of partner. (i am an exception 😉 Hence she feels like this on her honeymoon – a strange man for a husband for life! And yes it is about reincarnation but in this version, she is pulling his leg in an effort to draw him out and make him react.

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      3. oh thank you for explaining. O.k. so this husband is not the husband she wanted to marry, he is not the one she loves, but she even pulled his leg to react him? I do not understand the sense of this…

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  1. Was she bluffing and making up a story? But then when her husband suggested knocking on the door, she retreated. But why horrified? Was it just knocking on a strangers door or she was scared to see what would have been?
    Good Morning Dahlia. I did not realise you wrote both stories back to back.I liked them both.

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    1. Ah thank you 🙂 She was bluffing and pulling his leg but she was too naive to guess that he too could pull her leg. Being imaginative she had already visualized him asking them if Suki lived here and if his girlfriend had been lynched 😀

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