Sauce for the Gander

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Photo (c) Roger Bultot

Sauce for the Gander

 Words 100

“Chunnilal!”

“Who’s it?” Chunnilal called from within.

“It’s your friend. Was amnesia part of your dowry?”

“Come in!”

“A remarkable transformation of your dingy squalid quarters.” Kanha whistled.

“My wife’s handiwork.”

“Mmm the aroma of freshly tempered dal! Makes me regret bachelorhood.”

“Stay for dinner.” Chunnilal succumbed to his wife’s nudge.

“Not today. I’ve been summoned by your heartbroken paramour.” He winked and vanished.

“That troublemaker!” Chunnilal cursed.

“But not a liar.”

“It was before…”

“Would you overlook my ‘before’?” She challenged.

“I would.” He swore.

“Then we are even.” She smiled.

“You mean…NO! Get out.”

“Even but not equal.

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Written for the Friday Fictioneers – a story in 100 words or less. Thank you Rochelle for hosting the challenge and Roger Bultot for the photo prompt. To read the other stories inspired by this prompt click here.

Thanks for reading – have a great weekend 🙂

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Dahlia

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35 thoughts on “Sauce for the Gander”

  2. What’s sauce for the Gander is definitely not the sauce for the Goose. ( I have altered the saying) . If she was clever she would have made a big fuss about his ‘before’ and thrown the freshly tempered daal at him. Ha! Ha!

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  4. Well done, telling the story so believably, entirely in dialogue. It’s a risky thing to do, because any little falseness in the characters’ voices pulls the reader up short and you lose the flow. But you pull it off fluently.
    And I agree with Neil; the story arc extends robustly beyond the written words.

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    1. I disagree, Penny. Dialogue can be tricky, especially in a 100-word story, but you can communicate a lot more about the character’s character rather than just telling with narrative. That gets old quickly with the reader.

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      1. I quite agree that dialogue adds greatly to a story. But I was talking about telling essentially the entire story in dialogue. That’s not easy to accomplish, but here Dahlia has succeeded.

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      2. I prefer writing in dialogue because I have been doing dialogues in my head for as long as I can remember. Narrative script especially the lyrical descriptive texts is something that I find difficult if not impossible to do.

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  11. I loved the honesty in writing this story, though short yet can fill in pages and pages, very deeply insighting yet so blunt somewhere, i loved the way you have written this dialogue, very meaningful and heartfelt, though i agree that you left it inbetween somewhere….very well written…

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