The Song Within

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Photo (c) Marie Gail Stratford

The Song Within

Words 100

She was late. All because of the cook. And so inconsiderate of him to take the car.

The signal turned green and the surging crowd spilled on to the road.

It was just February and already so hot.

Oww her shoes hurt.

Not as much as her piercing barbed comments.

Cursing, she hurried ahead of the riff-raff.

A melodious voice rose above the traffic din. “aaaa~aaaa am the one of happy colors.”

The next winner of Voice India!

She slowed down.

A garish electric blue sweater wearing strange mismatched socks limped past her.

Wait.

Not socks but a prosthetic leg.

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*Main hoon khush rang Heena – a Hindi movie song.

Written for the Friday Fictioneer – a story in 100 words or less. Thanks to Rochelle for hosting the challenge and Marie Gail Stratford for the photo prompt. To read the other stories inspired by this prompt click here.

Thanks for reading and for sharing your thoughts.

 

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Dahlia

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45 thoughts on “The Song Within”

    1. Appreciate your frank comment Dale 🙂 I attempted to show how we take things for granted, get irritated at the slightest inconveniences and forget to count our blessings. She is on her way to office on foot, rushed, irritated and then she hears someone crossing the road along with her singing a joyous song – who she realizes is an amputee.

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      1. I realise it was what you were trying to convey. I think it’s because I took some parts too literally and not so much as thoughts crossing her mind.

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  6. You’ve constructed that story well, Dahlia. You pile up all the frustrations of the day, small and large and then show us the prosthetic leg. ‘Show don’t tell,’ doesn’t come neater than that! Well done!
    BTW for my cultural education, am I right in guessing that the her in “Not as much as her piercing barbed comments” is the mother-in-law of your main character?

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    1. Thanks Penny for such an awesome comment – I am smiling from ear to ear! And yes you are right regarding the MIL but only partially! She was actually worried about her boss who is quite a terror but then at the last minute I replaced the word boss and deliberately made it ambiguous so that it may extend to an evil MIL as well 😀

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  12. Great story. These days when I walk with dodgy and painful knees, I remember running down the escalators and sprinting for the buses. But I am thankful I can walk unaided and go to my various classes.

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