One Fine Evening

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Photo (c) Roger Bultot

One Fine Evening

Words 97

What a beautiful evening an exhilarated Suresh thought as he left the office. Just the kind Meera went gaga over.

He couldn’t wait to go home and share the good news. He would hold her in his arms and apologize for his cruel words. He couldn’t take them back but he would make it up to her.

A romantic dinner at the swanky houseboat restaurant.

And a movie.

Her choice.

Oh how her eyes would sparkle!

He willed the traffic to move faster.

“Meera!” He entered the darkened bedroom.

How odd.

Meera’s feet dangled at eye level.

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Written for the Friday Fictioneers – a story in 100 words or less. Thanks to Rochelle for hosting the challenge and Roger Bultot for the photo prompt. To read the other stories inspired by this photo click here.

Whew! I almost missed the party 😀

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Dahlia

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43 thoughts on “One Fine Evening”

    1. I was struggling with the prompt – it was of course a beautiful scene but yet there was an underlying sense of eeriness, a stillness as if waiting for something to happen. I wanted to write about two different perspectives but couldnt progress beyond that due to other commitments. And then the story just wrote itself.

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  3. Oh, the damage we can do when we’re cruel. The words Suresh spoke can’t have seemed terribly important to him; he worked through the day and was cheerful by the evening. But for poor Meera, those words cut away the last of her self-respect and self-confidence.
    You tell the story very well, Dahlia. The twist is genuinely shocking. Well done!

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  9. Disturbingly eerie, that is why the credit goes to you, it is sending me shivers …a hauntingly beautiful, well written, thrilling story…one of your best in this segment!

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  12. So sad. Sometimes we say things in the heat of the moment ends in a tragedy. Your picture is perfect for the story. Everything looks beautiful, full of promise but moments later it just goes dark.The sun ( a Life) is gone.

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  15. Ohh! That’s heartbreaking. This one struck a bit close to home. You see, I’ve always been a huge fan of Linkin Park. In a tragic turn of events, their lead singer had also taken his life, and I’d been listening to one of their songs as I read your post. Losing a loved one unexpectedly… what a terrible feeling that must be. Words have got so much power, and when they don’t come across as intended, they have the power to haunt you for the rest of your life.

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