Missed Call

Hello friends, curious about the outcome, I couldn’t resist writing a sequel to last week’s FF: The Helpline Number but I think (and hope) this works as a standalone story as well. As usual thank you for your indulgence 🙂

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Photo (c) Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Missed Call

Words 100

 “Yes?” The portly neighbor’s eyes glistened.

“I’m locked out.” She said. “Could you call a carpenter?”

“At this time?” He opened the door.

She backed away.

But she wouldn’t call him.

 

His house was spic and span. Not a crease out of place. Just the way he liked it. Yet everything looked cold, clinical.

He gave the cushion a restless twitch.

Her inhaler.

 His breath caught.

What if she needed it?

 What did he care?

She had walked out.

Why the hell wasn’t she picking her phone?

 

How careless can you be?” He brandished her inhaler.

She burrowed into him.

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Written for the Friday Fictioneers – A story in 100 words or less. Thank you Rochelle for hosting the challenge and the photo prompt. To read the other stories inspired by this prompt click here.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Dahlia

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38 thoughts on “Missed Call”

  1. Ah! I didn’t read your preamble so I had to read the sequel twice. Now I get it, and can’t help feeling she might be better off without him unless one of them has the power to compromise. Having said that, I did! 🙂

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  2. Dear Dahlia,

    He does have the upper hand in this situration. I feel her frustration and simultaneous relief. I suspect one day she’ll remember the inhaler and all her other belongings and leave this lifeless relationship. Although that isn’t always the case, is it? Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. Dhalia a wonderful way to give a big twist and taking the perception to another level, you gave a positive twist in the story…but both stories are interwoven to show a larger picture beyond our thoughts….Loved the twist you make..Thank you ….

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    1. Thank you Claire for you comment. She got locked out without her keys and phone which he didnt know about. He came ostensibly to give her inhaler but it was probably his sixth sense (that she was in trouble) that sent him to her. Does that make sense?

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  4. I’m really glad you’ve given us the sequel, especially as it has a happy ending! And, yes, I think it is happy. He cared enough to make a special journey to her flat, just in case she needed her inhaler (which could potentially save her life, of course). She burrowed into him; she could have just said “Thank you very much”. It will be hard work, but they’ve definitely got something!

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