Time for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle – a story in 100 words or less. Please click here for more stories on the photo prompt provided this week by Shaktiki Sharma – thanks!
Incarcerated
Words 101
Clang! The door grated.
Startled, Ramu descended from the clouds. He donned an industrious look and pored intently over his grueling task.
“Eat and go back to work. Don’t dawdle.”
“Yes Ma.”
“You need to study harder, do better.”
“I am trying.”
“Our debts are mounting. If you crack the entrance exams, all will be well.”
“But Ma…”
The door closed.
Silent, suffocating darkness engulfed him.
A lone lamp threw up gigantic shadows of the thick tomes strewn about. The weight of expectations bore down upon him, crushing him, choking him.
If only he could escape.
Somehow.
Anyhow.
Jump… Slit… Hang…
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Terrifying last line, great twist. I hope they don’t go through with it and manage to escape some other way… Good writing.
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Thanks Lian.
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Sorry for the typo Lain 😦
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It’s okay, I get that a lot from American readers, where Lain is a girl’s name! – it’s funny / odd to think some readers think I’m a female!!
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Ahh no – your name is new to me – I am from India. Btw your DP is pretty clear on that…
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Iain is a Scottish Gaelic name – in English it is simply ‘John’. I think it’s pretty clear, but I guess some people haven’t heard of the name before 😉
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It seems to be my typo day 😦 Iain – in my defense, I do have a headache. Iain becomes John! Interesting I would have never thought 🙂
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Nice thriller , leaves someone asking for more.
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Thanks for reading
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No dearth of Ramus here that are forced in to the gind mills of our education system. Nice take.
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Thanks
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Very dark last line. The pressure put on people…
Great story!
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Thank you
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A very disturbing ending!..but the chakki reminded me of the famous scene..”Chakki peeesing…chakki peeeeeesing….” 😉 😀
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😀 but of course!
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Oh dear… that last line is a worry…expectation is a heavy burden
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Thank you for reading Laurie 🙂
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I love those grindstones… old is gold.
If only he is allowed to stay in his clouds!! A hard-hitting last line… a death knell!! This is when I realise how blessed my brothers and I are !!
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Yes, we have a lot to be thankful for. Thanks for reading
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Sad but hauntingly true…despise it but cant run away from it…disturbing but you did a good job…
thank you
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