Hello! I know what you all are thinking – now what 🙂 And you are right! As usual, I am up to no good, poking my nose into stuff that are not my business. But what to do – Rochelle’s Friday Fictioneers (photo prompts and 100 word stories) has me hooked. I find it fascinating how a single prompt can inspire such a diverse range of stories – quite remarkable. Anyway I couldn’t quite resist, so here I am with another attempt. But first the prompt.
Thinking…
Word count – 99
There was a gasp of horror and a crowd gathered.
Help! Someone save her! Mommy, take me along, Mommy I want to swim too! Someone do something! Hurry!
The waves thrash her body dragging her deeper into the ocean. Floating all alone in the sea under the blazing sun. Until the predators arrive one by one, to nibble at her flesh. She lay passive as they swarm all over pecking at her mortal remains.
Unknown hands drag her daughter away. She is alone. Then the predators arrive…
“Mommy?” A hand tugged hers.
Shuddering, she stepped back from the edge.
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That was a fantastic and terrifying story. Beautiful ending, despite all the trauma that led to her having that vision, and allowing her to step back from the edge – and that edge could be literal, or figurative. Perhaps, it’s a nightmare about what she’d experience when she saw her mother being eaten alive? Or is it a futuristic vision preventing her from walking into the ocean, and letting creatures have at her?
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Thanks for dropping in and leaving me a note 🙂 Interesting possibilities there. The way I saw it was the mother was ‘thinking’ about jumping and she visualized the following sequence of events until her daughter’s future tugged her back from the brink…
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Yes, I saw that as well. Forgot to mention that one.
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🙂
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That was one of the reasons I liked your story so much – the number of possible interpretations there made it very tasty (that’s probably the wrong word for this context, I guess 🙂 ) !
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Thank you – I often consider my writes as ‘cooking’ so I am more than thrilled to have this piece called tasty 😉
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thanks for stopping by on my blog. your story left me worried, great post
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That’s a new reason to be happy about 😀 Thank you!
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Ooooo wow, very good. I have chills
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Thank you
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That’s chilling. The predators: human or fishy?
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Whatever you like to think! Thank you for reading and commenting
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Dear Dahlia,
My mother was terrified of water. I never was. I wonder if she had visions like this every time I went swimming. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle for hosting, reading and commenting 🙂
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It’s reads like someone dreaming of a jurassic park type situation. Many interpretations for sure. Nicely done.
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Thank you for reading and commenting 🙂
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Very good story. It left me wondering.
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Thank you 🙂
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Interesting all the different interpretations this has garnered. I took it to mean that her daughter had drowned, eaten and as she contemplates a similar fate for herself she denies the ghostly hand offered by her daughter and chooses instead to live.
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Wow that is interesting! Never thought of it that way but quite plausible as well. Thank you for sharing your thoughts 🙂
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You’re welcome.
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Fabulous! the way you could imagine something so wonderful from that lovely picture of waves set to embrace the rocks…so many precious lives would be saved if one deciding for a suicide could have had such visions of the disasters they would be leaving behind when they take that one easy-way-out step. You imagined and expressed it so beautifully!
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Thank you MM for summing up the message of the story so aptly 🙂
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Lol!…As for Calvin, how much more ironic can his statement be! :-))
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😀
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I love this and can only imagine the rest of the story. I’d love to read it if you do continue. I’m a fan!
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Thank you so much!
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This came through as just code? I’ll look for it on your site.
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Sorry -even I dont know what it is 😦
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This is an amazing story! You do a fantastic job of capturing that feeling.
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Thanks for reading and commenting – glad you liked!
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I thought I had already commented on this, but just realized that there is another story that has a very similar theme, sorry for the late comment. The concept of the child bringing the parent back from the brink is very powerful. If only everyone who thinks about suicide had such a life-line.
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Yes…Thank you for reading and commenting.
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Very chilling! Quite a terrifying story, but a great read all the same!
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Thank you for reading and commenting 🙂
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Wowwwww…. now this is profound thinking!! If a woman can bring such thoughts when at the brink of her tether’s end, then there is still hope!!
Kudos to you!!!!!!
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Thank you 🙂
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Sad but a bitter truth…can be one of the lesson in our kids social books…to make all of us understand that each one of us is important not just for your own self but all the more for the people around us who need us and who are important, thank you sometimes reading something like this can help someone in need of HOPE… GREAT GOING…YOU ARE MAGICAL!!! Kim sends a thanks to you unknowingly….
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😘😘😘
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